Reply To: Please critique my membership sales letter..

by Trevor Dumbleton
in
Comments are off for this post.

Home Page Forums Ask Anything Please critique my membership sales letter.. Reply To: Please critique my membership sales letter..

#2074

Trevor Dumbleton
Participant

OK, skimmed – great start (and it’s always easier to improve something that exists) – and a few comments:

For me, it doesn’t address the “what’s in it for me” early enough.

Early bullet points merge on screen – bold a few important words here and there to help with that.

Not sure why month 1 is building a buyer’s email list – I know email is important but you need to tie it in with the early claim of reliable and consistent income streams. Have I got my niche before I join you?

Also not sure if list building, product creation, YouTube domination, membership site creation and website flipping all belong under one roof – I could probably be convinced but my quick skim didn’t reveal why.

Purely from an operational point, make sure you diarise to change 2016 each January 1st to the next year (or use a short script or a Server side include that does it for you – drop me a message if that’s clear as mud)

Share this article